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DAVID E. BARNES
Sheltered in the Shade			

What he wanted- was behind
a discolored sandstone wall, 
Hidden in a garden,
under the fragrance 
of small purple blossoms
amongst the simple beauty of things.
He had always looked forward to growing old,
reminisce with ripened friends;
some depart this life, from time-to-time,
someday, it shall be his turn; 
and after that: 
only then, 
shall he lie- where he has so long - 
longed to be,
together-
beneath, the scent of jasmine.
--- © debarnes September 2003 -2004 -2006. DAVID E. BARNES began writing at 18 years of age when he took up folk guitar, performing at folk centers around mainland Australia and Tasmania, finally settling in Perth in1972. BARNES became a full-time writing poet in 1996. DAVID -now an active Internet poet-- has been published around Australia also at many online poetry venues in America, England and France.

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ROBERT F. ABBOTT
Write and Speak(?) for the Ear

You and I may not aspire to write great books or make great speeches. But almost all of us want something to happen when we write or speak. And, the more we tailor our words for the ears of readers and listeners, the greater our chances of getting the results we want.

By writing for the ear, I mean that spoken words can have more power than written words. After all, when we have important messages, we prefer to deliver them verbally and personally, rather than by sending a written message.

Of course, it's not practical or possible to deliver every message verbally. But, if we can capture some of the nuances of the spoken word we can increase the power of our messages. When we write for the ear, our writing undergoes some subtle but important changes. Our words, sentences, and paragraphs change in several important ways.

Consider the number of pauses that occur when we speak. Most of us pause often, more often than when we write. To capture those pauses, use commas or one of the other 'slowing' punctuation marks, such as colons and semicolons.

Writing for the ear also means shorter sentences. And even fragments of sentences. As you can imagine, speech tends to greater spontaneity than written expression, which means shorter sentences and more fragments.

Many of the same principles hold when we make formal speeches or presentations. Especially if we speak from prepared notes.

Whatever we say, when we speak publicly, has to go in through listeners' ears. And so, if you'll allow me to belabor the obvious, we need to write speeches for listeners' ears, not our mouths.

You can call on many quick and easy techniques. For example, use short words whenever possible. Words such as 'many' rather than 'numerous'; 'use' rather than 'utilize'; and 'need' rather than 'require'.

You can also speak for the ear by using common words rather than jargon or technical words. Step back from your speech, after writing it, and ask yourself if you use words that a child will understand.

We also want vivid words, words that fire up our imagination, that paint new images on the canvases of readers' minds. Descriptive words that convey action and emotion, words that drive ideas into our heads.

Use active verbs and not passive verbs. Banish words like 'is', and 'are'. Also, check for the word 'being' and rewrite to get rid of it. Bring in verbs that do something.

Now that you've got the words you want, put them into short sentences. One short sentence. Followed by another short sentence. But, every once in while add a longer sentence for variety and to reduce the chances of boring your audience. And, keep the ideas simple within those long sentences.

I'm biased, I know. After spending the better part of a decade writing and reading radio news copy, I think it's a good idea to write for the ear.

Try it for yourself. Write something, read it out loud, and ask yourself about the effect it's likely to have on readers. Re-write as necessary, and read it aloud again. Repeat the process a few times. By the time you finish you should have a well-crafted piece of writing, even if no one ever reads it aloud or hears it spoken.


--- copyright ROBERT F. ABBOTT. ABBOTT offers three free chapters from his book, A Manager's Guide to Newsletters: Communicating for Results at http://www.managersguide.com/free-sample.html . He also offers free subscriptions to 'Abbott's Communication Letter', a free newsletter that helps you enhance your career through improved business communication, at http://www.abbottletter.com .

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JEAN HULL HERMAN
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Pity the poor moth: Suppose Evolution had taught it not to rush at candle flames, To circle away from light stanchions, torchieres, To wait until some other of its kind Has determined the potential for death Inherent in the fascinating. What would this enlightened moth do - Having encoiled its genetic lesson, Flitted knowledgeably past tempting lamps and torches, Bridged great gaps of darkness with learnéd wings, Avoided every fluorescent problem - When confronted with the Northern Lights? Who has seen God's glory in the northern skies And remained unmoved? What can even such a savant do, Confounded by the brilliance of certain death?

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